New project in rough

alex · Post by **alex** » 07 Aug 2007, 14:57

i post again my work because it leftovers me just shadows for all character. Please tell me the errors that you can note on my work. Thank you very much

alex · Post by **alex** » 17 Aug 2007, 08:28

i've post my final work in the gallery, if someone wants to see it.
Thanks

musrami · Post by **musrami** » 17 Aug 2007, 19:16

Hé, hé, very funny.

Peter Wassink · Post by **Peter Wassink** » 18 Aug 2007, 09:37

i don't understand the end title

whats the second hand?

ZigOtto · Post by **ZigOtto** » 18 Aug 2007, 12:38

I supposed he meant when you buy cigarettes by a "non-official" way,
you know, half-priced smuggled (falsified) paquets by hands to hands at the street's corner ...
but the animation seems to be talking about "the smoke inhaled by no-smokers people" ...

btw, shouldn't it be "spawn" ?
also, I think the big text-panel at the end could have a half-transparent white BG instead of full-opaque,
to distinguish through it the end of the scene, as it is now, we have the idea that we lost the end of the anim,
and the panel coming is very rude ... maybe a short fade-in ?

my last criticism will go to the smoke animation, ... a way too speed to my eyes.

A1 · Post by A1 » 18 Aug 2007, 12:59

I guess the message is open for interpretation
I interpretedeteteteuu (whats the word?) it as beeing about people smoking along (second hand smoke) and then getting pissed off.
But it could mean anything really... Maybe it is better to use your native language on this one.

alex · Post by **alex** » 20 Aug 2007, 13:22

ok, i'm verry sorry for my english which is far to be perfect, as you can notice.

I would say that a non-smoking person can have violents reactions when they meet a smoker. it was a verry easy subject but not with the good word to be understand.
I will change this in the animation, not to makes troubles for everybody.

Sorry again and thanks you to react on my
animation. As i said before, i'm student, and i
need that you review my work.